tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25573541.post2948767861098351417..comments2023-07-01T07:31:28.450-06:00Comments on LDS Publisher: Scare-Your-Pants-Off #3LDS_Publisherhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15053645600240124892noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25573541.post-29429698813847533002007-11-01T06:48:00.000-06:002007-11-01T06:48:00.000-06:00I love the very last line. You also get the creep ...I love the very last line. You also get the creep factor in "an icy gush of air rushed [past] her, almost through her."<BR/><BR/>Lots (too many) scary stories begin with someone waking up. I'd like to see something different. <BR/><BR/>Watch your use of ellipses. Those should be used very sparingly (as in, never). Watch your spelling. <BR/><BR/>"Again, the icy gush..." When was the first time?<BR/><BR/>If someone glimpses something in a mirror, they don't usually rush to the mirror for a better look. They turn first to look where the mirror is reflecting. Then if there's nothing there, they look back in the mirror. <BR/><BR/>But again, I really like your last line. That creeped me out.LDS_Publisherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15053645600240124892noreply@blogger.com