tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25573541.post7519470023930564286..comments2023-07-01T07:31:28.450-06:00Comments on LDS Publisher: 31: The Christmas DefenseLDS_Publisherhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15053645600240124892noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25573541.post-12676220176894818082009-08-31T21:29:35.061-06:002009-08-31T21:29:35.061-06:00I don't know how I missed this story during th...I don't know how I missed this story during the voting and I'm not sure I would have voted for it because it DOES need some more development, but this writer has a great voice. The beginning was especially strong. Maybe dialogue would have punched it up?Melanie Jacobsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02489615939726209573noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25573541.post-24027568749669519032009-08-22T11:41:04.085-06:002009-08-22T11:41:04.085-06:00I vote for this one.I vote for this one.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25573541.post-91063811966100487042009-08-20T11:02:02.532-06:002009-08-20T11:02:02.532-06:00I agree about the story needing a better ending, a...I agree about the story needing a better ending, a better arc. But I still found this the most enjoyable read... so, I vote here.Kristyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15228662085549417098noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25573541.post-8074666423927442652009-08-18T11:06:14.651-06:002009-08-18T11:06:14.651-06:00VoteVoteAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25573541.post-78803720645465099722009-08-17T11:25:22.253-06:002009-08-17T11:25:22.253-06:00I loved the premise and I found it well written, b...I loved the premise and I found it well written, but there is no character arc and without a character arc it is simply a story about a young boy who made a very bad choice and yet had no consequence to pay. It isn't something I would want to share with my family as we don't see his remorse or change of heart or any kind of consequence for his wrong choices. There is no reason why he got off other than a sneaky attorney's ploy of sympathy at Christmas - I wouldn't want my kids thinking they could get away with stuff just because its a special holiday.<br /><br />With a better ending and character arc it would be a fantastic storyAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25573541.post-57742170801241652322009-08-16T14:47:25.511-06:002009-08-16T14:47:25.511-06:00I enjoyed reading this story. It was light-hearted...I enjoyed reading this story. It was light-hearted--a bit implausible--just fun. It was very well written. I could "see" everything that happened in my imagination. Why did the jury decide he was not guilty when all the evidence was stacked against him?Kaye P. Clarkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00300628601690238082noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25573541.post-55371669504182762412009-08-15T23:40:49.752-06:002009-08-15T23:40:49.752-06:00Ugh. This was so CLOSE to being good. I thought th...Ugh. This was so CLOSE to being good. I thought the friend would put a Christmas tree on the courthouse lawn or the boy would talk about Christmas or the girl would get how sincere he was. GREAT PREMISE but no arc. Nobody did anything extraordinary or learned anything extraordinary. With a new ending it could be really good.Christine Thackerayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05551874470033926037noreply@blogger.com