tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25573541.post7661270529716729451..comments2023-07-01T07:31:28.450-06:00Comments on LDS Publisher: 5: A Sudden ResolveLDS_Publisherhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15053645600240124892noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25573541.post-72894101526873774122009-08-23T10:12:21.018-06:002009-08-23T10:12:21.018-06:00I've been thinking and if your last line was s...I've been thinking and if your last line was something like, "I hope you like your Christmas present." It would bring it back to Christmas and be more glib.Christine Thackerayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05551874470033926037noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25573541.post-55132366212405864002009-08-18T13:15:04.201-06:002009-08-18T13:15:04.201-06:00I think it's awesome that Ava isn't very l...I think it's awesome that Ava isn't very likable! Makes it so realistic. It's so true, the good guy always likes these cheerleader types....excellent character development, especially for a short story!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01416747294617936271noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25573541.post-39082042696370264872009-08-18T13:13:00.719-06:002009-08-18T13:13:00.719-06:00VOTE!!!!VOTE!!!!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01416747294617936271noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25573541.post-57915859651193453472009-08-17T20:32:35.377-06:002009-08-17T20:32:35.377-06:00I didn't like Ava, so I couldn't understan...I didn't like Ava, so I couldn't understand why the narrator sacrificed for her as he did. And how could he forget that her father was a jeweler?Kaye P. Clarkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00300628601690238082noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25573541.post-29796050726121283602009-08-17T20:25:18.793-06:002009-08-17T20:25:18.793-06:00I like this one, I liked the poor character that t...I like this one, I liked the poor character that took the wrath of the father. Well written and well developed characters for such a short piece. <br /><br />I vote for this one.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25573541.post-38857278543602976202009-08-17T12:36:05.254-06:002009-08-17T12:36:05.254-06:00Vote!Vote!Mary Grayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14381578745894421730noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25573541.post-83147461516664308782009-08-17T12:16:26.780-06:002009-08-17T12:16:26.780-06:00I vote for this one! (But work on the last line.)I vote for this one! (But work on the last line.)Christine Thackerayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05551874470033926037noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25573541.post-63109377441707578282009-08-16T10:30:54.035-06:002009-08-16T10:30:54.035-06:00This story is absolutely perfect to me. It capture...This story is absolutely perfect to me. It captures the essence of what Christmas is all about, which is personal sacrifice for others to emulate our Saviour, which is what the young man (narrator) did for the girl he loved. And it is written with restraint, without sentimentality, yet the relationships and characterizations of the characters involved show depth and realism. Very hard to do in such a brief work, the author is extremely talented and I sure do hope to read more from this author. The twist at the end was amazing. Not at all predictable, and so fitting. This story was very well-crafted.Karen Gowenhttp://karenjonesgowen.vox.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25573541.post-23872641335033539212009-08-15T18:32:11.137-06:002009-08-15T18:32:11.137-06:00I LOVED this story! It did all the things a good s...I LOVED this story! It did all the things a good story should and I didn't get the ending until it happened. My only two suggestions would be that I need a better definition of the narrator. It took me a while to figure out it was a 'he' and the last line didn't do it for me. I wanted something a little more satisfying rather than a thought that's never delivered.Christine Thackerayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05551874470033926037noreply@blogger.com