Perhaps you could do a feature sometime on the things that stood out to you in a positive light, like good examples from actual queries. Thanks!
Unfortunately, I can't post good examples because part of what makes them good is their idea—and since I'm only the first reader of the queries, it would be a sticky situation if I said here that a particular query was really good, and then it got rejected at the next rung up the ladder.
But what I would be willing to do (and have always been willing to do) is query critiques. If a reader sends me their query, I'll post it with commentary on what makes it good and what doesn't quite work.
Also, read this: 10 Steps to a Good Query.
PLEASE NOTE #1: I will assume that ALL QUERIES sent to the LDS Publisher email addresses are intended for critique. I do not accept queries for publication through this site.
PLEASE NOTE #2: DO NOT send your query as an attachment. Post it straight into the body of your email.